Poem :)

[SkyeSpitfire]

Hi everyone - I wanted to post a poem of mine here and just see if people could give their reviews. People here tend to be a lot deeper and in tune with the 'other places' so I wondered if readers might get the drift of what I'm trying to convey - thanks!

For all my ways I found a way
to use the errors of yesterday
to find a flight to further the fight
against the edge of darkness and solitary night.
Where darkness revealed the ultimate sin
As one learns to feel, to love again.
My life is wrought with dangers unknown
I planted a horror where seeds are sown
to return and learn, for I will always yearn
for the fire that stings, destroys and burns.

Yet in me exists the water that flows,
In passion, it lives, it screams, it grows
into the most feared weapon of all my foes.
I may never be what I seek out to be
I may fail, forever on my knees
but I cried, I tried, failure I defied
living forever with the essence of pride.

Yet this voice that whispers holds no shame
Ignorance is no player in this game.
For all my ambition, the crux of my soul
As much as I strive, I'll always know
A mysterious beauty in each life foretold
It was love that forever made me whole.

 

[Twilight]

Personally this Poem makes me think of Reincarnation, we have made mistakes and we can learn to correct them in time ^_^

 

[BethC]

Skye,


I like it. Very thoughtful

 

[hydrolad]

To "SkyeSpitfire"


A very well written and thought out poem, correct in word use and grammar and easy to read.


It speaks to me of Reincarnation, the need for change and a Soul that can withstand the passage down through the ages.


It appears that you may have a talent in writing, if possible you might want to attend a workshop or classes in Creative Writing which also focuses on Poetry composition to fine tune this talent.


Good Luck.

 

[starrynight]

A very well written and thought out poem, correct in word use and grammar and easy to read.
It speaks to me of Reincarnation, the need for change and a Soul that can withstand the passage down through the ages.


It appears that you may have a talent in writing, if possible you might want to attend a workshop or classes in Creative Writing which also focuses on Poetry composition to fine tune this talent.


Good Luck.

DITTO


Yes Skye I think you have a knack. I'm in awe of anybody who can get to grips with poetry as it's goes way over my head.


Doing a course could be a good idea to get you the leads you need.

 

[SkyeSpitfire]

Thanks everyone, that's really nice of you to put your input in. Writing is definitely my main ambition so it makes me happy you think I can articulate myself well. I'm also pleased you see where I'm coming from ... Asking people on my 'friends list' on Facebook for catch its meaning is a bit more difficult! Thank you again - it's very encouraging